Presentation : Very well presented! I knew what things were without illustrations but could be fun with them too!
Engagement : I thought the Hazbin Hotel joke was funny! I did the choice to buy the yaoi at Newbury LMAO. I didn't know what some of the other brands were but that wasnt too much of a big deal.
Theme : Very fun theme! Not too many consequences in the game but it was a fun story and didn't quite feel like it needed dire stakes.
Viability: The game is definitely playable. There is one path that had a bit of an error, which is by the end of the game (after purchasing gifts for each other), but besides that, every other path to me was playable!
Presentation: The game is definitely understandable and has a clear storyline of just going out shopping with a friend! I think once you add in your visuals too the storyline will be even clearer with illustrations of items.
Theme: I think visually the game has a clear aesthetic and its super cute! Its giving me like a GirlsGoGames style gameplay which I love! So excited to see the final with images!
Engagement: it does capture my imagination and does give the feeling of going shopping! I think once things are formatted with the images (like having things on the left and right) the game could really capture that "in a mall " feeling.
Viability: It's playable ! There's a couple typos but I think with a proof read it should be fine. I definitely feel your personality through the dialogue.
Presentation: Excited to see with the images. I do worry about scope for time when making all the images but if you feel you can do it I'd love to see it!
Theme: Very cute and fun excited to see how my outfit and item choices make endings.
-viability; it's playable! i think it'd be a good idea to proofread your text since idk if this is your final version or just placeholder text But you have a typo in hot topic with hazbin hotel you say "deas" instead of "dead". i think it'd be a good idea to decide if you're using correct punctuation or grammar or intentionally not using it and be consistent with it :]
-presentation; i think it will be a lot more cohesive with images :3 i worry a bit about the scope for you since its kinda a lot of images But also i think you can reassess if needed.
-theme; the background color reminds me of your backpack. im excited for your images i think itll be really cute :3
-i think theres something you could add with either having a friendship bar or an inventory of the things you buy but also i understand if you dont want to overcomplicate it
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Viability : It's a complete story!
Presentation : Very well presented! I knew what things were without illustrations but could be fun with them too!
Engagement : I thought the Hazbin Hotel joke was funny! I did the choice to buy the yaoi at Newbury LMAO. I didn't know what some of the other brands were but that wasnt too much of a big deal.
Theme : Very fun theme! Not too many consequences in the game but it was a fun story and didn't quite feel like it needed dire stakes.
Overall very fun!
Viability: The game is definitely playable. There is one path that had a bit of an error, which is by the end of the game (after purchasing gifts for each other), but besides that, every other path to me was playable!
Presentation: The game is definitely understandable and has a clear storyline of just going out shopping with a friend! I think once you add in your visuals too the storyline will be even clearer with illustrations of items.
Theme: I think visually the game has a clear aesthetic and its super cute! Its giving me like a GirlsGoGames style gameplay which I love! So excited to see the final with images!
Engagement: it does capture my imagination and does give the feeling of going shopping! I think once things are formatted with the images (like having things on the left and right) the game could really capture that "in a mall " feeling.
Viability: It's playable ! There's a couple typos but I think with a proof read it should be fine. I definitely feel your personality through the dialogue.
Presentation: Excited to see with the images. I do worry about scope for time when making all the images but if you feel you can do it I'd love to see it!
Theme: Very cute and fun excited to see how my outfit and item choices make endings.
-viability; it's playable! i think it'd be a good idea to proofread your text since idk if this is your final version or just placeholder text But you have a typo in hot topic with hazbin hotel you say "deas" instead of "dead". i think it'd be a good idea to decide if you're using correct punctuation or grammar or intentionally not using it and be consistent with it :]
-presentation; i think it will be a lot more cohesive with images :3 i worry a bit about the scope for you since its kinda a lot of images But also i think you can reassess if needed.
-theme; the background color reminds me of your backpack. im excited for your images i think itll be really cute :3
-i think theres something you could add with either having a friendship bar or an inventory of the things you buy but also i understand if you dont want to overcomplicate it